Chapter 2: - Published August 18th 2012 was on a Saturday and was in week 33 of 2012.
As of this writing it was 3146 days ago
FYI. April 1st is Discord's birthday :D
blink ... Chapter one was published after chapter... 10? Okay. Note to Chessie... Moving on. - she had to re upload chapter one.
I really like how the Scholar points out that both DPD and PACT are vitally needed. How they view each other reminds me of the "loving" way military members view those of other branches. The Chair Force is the spoiled youngest child :D
“Huh... I hear that creepy cabbie don’t have no Cutie Marks. Some kinda bizarro religious thing.”
cringe Man... I'm about to give him the label deathwish.
Still, I decided to go the diplomatic route.
... uh huh. This should be interesting. ooh. deathwish was dumbass last year. nice.
Hey, raise your hand if you think that the File Cloud sounds like a great idea on paper but an incredible stupid one to actually put into practice?
Oh I cant see your hands... how about you make a snarky remark in the comment section below?
Thats better.
One pony asking for the groundskeeping ledger wound up inadvertently receiving the case file for his own murder.
This reminds me of a scene from x-files where Fox gets told something about a pie and his death and then later comes across said pie? man, that was the 90s, and I don't want to think about how long ago THAT was.
Besides, it didn’t matter whether or not I happen to like the job. I’d taken the oath. I put my hoof on a book of law and swore to serve and protect. That means something, right?
Yes, it means something.
Two flat backed chairs that reminded me of the ones in the headmare’s office of my old elementary school sat facing the desk. I’d spent many hours in similar ones writing endless lines of things like ‘I will not help Sweet Shine replace the fruit in the teacher’s lounge with unripe zap apples.’
HA
“What makes you think you’re not here for me to take a skinning knife to your flanks?”
I clopped my hooves together and did not say, ‘because Taxi said there is.’ “I spoke to Telly. Besides, if you were going to fire me, there’d have been balloons, cake, and a gallows downstairs. And lemme just say, I was way more impressed back when it was ‘take a carrot peeler to your dick.’”
The not mentioning because Taxi is prob the smartest thing all morning. And I have to admit, the carrot peeler threat is more intimdating that the skinning knife.
She said nothing, but the drawer of her desk slid open and the vegetable-skinning instrument in question floated out to hang in midair for several seconds before dropping back out of sight. I swallowed sharply and my jaw snapped so fast I almost bit my own tongue.
Touche
One of the cleaning staff at the High Step Hotel called every paper and news station in the book before they called the PD switchboard.
Thanks.
in a voice so cheerful I almost retched - “You’re getting a partner!”
HAHAHAHHA, oh Hardy, just you wait until you see who it is.
“It’s a partner or a desk job. Take your pick. Frankly, I’d love to have you around the office more. I need somepony who can make a decent cup of coffee.”
Me? I'd take the desk. But man, I cant picture Hardy doing that.
but the weapon in her holster was a .32 caliber ‘Filly’ edition semi-automatic. It had the stopping power of a thrown gerbil and couldn’t have been any more girly if it had been pink.
snort
Swift swearing in. So touching. and her letter of recommendation :D
P.S. Swift, if you read this every night. your boss won't be able to. I remember what you did with that love letter in flight camp.
HA
Now, who does that remind you of, Hardy?
Yes, who.
.... Okay. So Chessie is a little cringed by the thought about someone cataloging SoD. And I'm sorry, okay, not sorry, but I'm kinda doing that. Everything named gets post. Gets a label. Right now its a mess. but eventually It will be done.
Including "Frosting" :D I love you Chessie!
If you’ve got somepony whose life you want to make miserable, give her a partner
and if you want to rub it in, make sure he sees the note.
Beohoof, General Hurricane, Victoria, Shining Armor, Shimmerstrike, Daring-Do, Aurora Borealis...
Shining Armor is FiM, so is Daring-Do.
I'm trying to remember if General Hurricane was one of the Wonderbolts that was taught.
Beohoof, is that Beowulf? the other two I don't know. If you can comment which ones are in friendship is magic I'd be grateful.
Okay, I can totally relate to swift. Knowing she seems crazy, but isn't. She is pretty sure where the line is for crazy and doesn't plan on crossing it.
Sweets, make nice
This is actually so funny. So I'm going to use a little bit of my meta knowledge here and explain. Hardy has had several girlfriends, and is not a virgin. However, to date in this story, not a single filly has made it past meeting Sweets who is very protective. So yes, Hardy had to tell her to make nice.
“Transfer? Was her IQ too high or something?”
LOL, this so fits. I would say the same thing about a marine or army person crossing over to the Navy or Chair Force.
... okay, maybe Hardy didn't need to tell Taxi to play nice. the first thing out of Swift's mouth is about the cab.
“I hope she taught you to fire something bigger than that. It might be a gun when it grows up, but right now, I’d toss it back.” [Taxi]
“It’s... standard issue...” She couldn’t keep the disappointment out of her voice.
“Yeah, and requisitions will be getting a nasty note about that. We’ll get you an actual gun. Don’t worry about it.”[Hardy]
:D
“We’re dipping way back into history, into the dark ages when Hardy still had a sense of humor and Celestia was in diapers.”
I swatted the seatback. "I’m not that old!”
HA!
"Hey, Sweets, the way I see it, cars have bumpers for a reason, okay?"
I have a friend with this opinion. He's 31 this year. The only reason why he knows how to turn on a car is because I took him to a movie theater and he wanted to sit in the driver seat while the movies played. Between movies I made him turn on the car, explaining how to do it.
slow moving earth pony towing a cart covered in a huge mound of cabbage
Who gets this reference! if he appears in the the story again i'm giving him a whos who with the name of Aang.
I love the story about why Hardy is NEVER allowed to drive again. FOUR cruisers in 6 weeks? okay. yeah. don't let him drive.
Chapter is over! there is 49 comments on this one. Lets go read some of them!
Wow, the DPD seems like an awfully terrifying place to work. I'm almost inclined to say it would be a bit exciting, but the apparent risk of personal injury or death makes me think otherwise. 
Swift Cuddles is already shaping up to be a really interesting character. She's a perfect contrast to Hardy; the bright-eyed rookie paired up with the hardened detective. It looks like we're getting closer to the thick of the plot next chapter. Looking forward to it! 
Not putting the novel here :D go check it out!
Two flat backed chairs that reminded me of the ones in the headmare’s office of my old elementary school sat facing the desk. I’d spent many hours in similar ones writing endless lines of things like ‘I will not help Sweet Shine replace the fruit in the teacher’s lounge with unripe zap apples.’
This is wonderful - it describes the scene, tells us about Hardy, and tells us the nature of the conversation about to take place, all in 2 sentences.
All your descriptions, of places, of people, of body language, are great. You excel at what I suck at.
Magic Llama
I'm from Detroit, and stereotypes ain't gonna hurt my feelings.
"I just feel like I should do more with my life than just write silly stories!”
OUCH!
Wheeeheeeheeee....Oh dear sir, I don't think you're likely to be disappointed. The entire point of this was to take 'generic cop detective story' and make it completely insane and pony. We actually went for following as many tropes of the genre as possible... but only to begin.
-Chessie
Forgot to mention this one.
“I’m not stupid! I know I won’t save Canterlot or... or get to fight monsters. I just feel like I should do more with my life than just write silly stories!”
I see what you did there. So she's a fanfic writer too?
Did You Know?
French Astronomer Pierre Janssen discovers helium in solar spectrum during eclipse
On August 18, 1868
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